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I. First Impression

When he hears Obi-Wan call Qui-Gon Master, it is as if the ship has lurched beneath him; he has been terribly no–what slaver would go through such an elaborate ruse to capture one boy, even a top racer? And he can sense the rightness, as surely as if he were beholding the wonders of the Jedi Temple already. (He is not sure what those wonders are, as mostly when he imagined Jedi they were flying or fighting, but right now the air seems as imbued with promise as with oxygen.)

So he assesses Obi-Wan again, and sees a man younger, less scarred, than Qui-Gon’s example had lead him to imagine Jedi to be; were he raised in Mos Espa, Anakin thought, Obi-Wan would be...what? A gambler, a farmer, a vagrant? He does not seem to fit any of those molds. On Tatooine, anyone with such...such a shy sort of politeness, paired with the authority and skill shown by the fact he carried a lightsaber, would be left alone.

II. Conflict

Obi-Wan was waiting when Anakin arrived in the apartment. He looked at the grease stains on Anakin’s brown-clad flanks, at the dirt tracked in across the immaculate Temple carpets. He knew better by now than to ask where Anakin had been.

Instead, he chose, “What did you learn?”

Anakin looked confused. He passed into the suite, began to undo dirt-stained tabards with his back to his teacher. “I learned that winning a couple races means attracting young fans who want advice.”

“Hmm. And do you advise them?”

“A little.”

“Be careful. If too many beings recognize you–I’ve given up telling you not to flee the temple on every whim, but Padawan–”

Anakin disappeared into his room, leaving the door cracked open. Obi-Wan thought about when the carpet-cleaning droid next made its rounds.

Anakin said, “I know, Master. I never stay long afterward. And there’s only so much to teach. They won’t ever be like me.”

The arrogance slipped out effortless and sincere, and Obi-Wan knew he was right; no one without the Force–no one with, if Obi-Wan were honest–could do the things Anakin did. But the difference between Master and apprentice was not as different as that between those with the Force and those without.

A memory came to Obi-Wan then, something that he wasn’t sure would be right, but that nagged at his brain until he revealed it. “Qui-Gon once told me that a good teacher’s greatest desire is for his student to become more talented than himself.”

“I think that’s a bit foolish,” Anakin said, and it was as if he had insulted Qui-Gon. “That could leave the teacher in danger. And it might not be possible. Everyone has so much talent. So many midi-chlorians.” He emerged into the sitting room, wearing a fresh tunic.

He felt what he had done and said, “I’m sorry,” and then, “I mean, I just think as a statement it’s too absolute.”

“That it is,” said Obi-Wan soberly.

III. Their Finest Hour

There is a moment, during the great hurtling final flight of the Invisible Hand, when in the storm of the Force Anakin slides aside into the calm center and sees Obi-Wan. He cannot spare a glance from the controls and readouts, but from the Jedi Master’s presence in the Force he can picture his mentor’s expression with almost no effort; jaw set beneath his beard, blue eyes straight ahead, hands loose but white on the armrests. Anakin knows how much Obi-Wan hates to fly, and so his unexpected, Force-borne calmness is a patch of serenity.

They could all die here, now, but Anakin has faced death before, and he cannot help but revel in speed, in how gouts of fire rip from the ship’s hull and flash past, cooling from white to red. He hears every crack and strain of the hull and understands their meaning as if they were language, Huttese or Basic or the song of the Force. He has always met action with action, but here by his Master’s example he meets it with silence, potential readiness, a calm center. For just a moment.

IV. Each Other’s Creations

It is on Mustafar, as their lightsaber blades cross like reality and its reflection in the mirror, that he realizes without a doubt that he is stronger than Obi-Wan. Not more experienced or more controlled–certainly not a better teacher. But he has always been more talented, and this, he realizes, makes the Council’s denial of his Mastery moot. He is apart from their system.

So they fight, strike-twist-strike-deflect-set, oh-so-precise, and Anakin thinks he has nothing more to learn.

***

And so, after another fight, in which the lightsaber blades were blue and green but nevertheless purer reflections of each other than were the blue and blue, one aspect of the Force asks another, “Master, can you possibly forgive me?”

“Of course. You have learned that no one should ever stop learning.”

“I know.” But a bit of rakishness remains. “That’s such a cliche.”

Obi-Wan had been trusting Anakin to pick up his platitude instead of the truth of what he said. “It isn’t. I say that everyone should keep learning, not that it is impossible to ever stop. Many stop. They become too used to a repetitive world.”

Anakin considers, replies; “I know now that we were all slaves to Palpatine; I was, and the Republic, and perhaps the Jedi. But I won’t confuse a Master who restricts one world with a mentor, who expands it, ever again.”

And because it is the Force speaking, two of its strongest aspects fused with itself again, Luke feels their thoughts, and breathes in deep the cool clear air of Endor, and smiles at his father.
Without access to fanfiction.net I'm getting twitchy. I'm not review-hungry, or I'd like to think I'm not -- I'd do this whether others read it or not. But knowing that others do read it now, I don't like leaving them without. And it's one of my favourite things to talk about.

So, would you like to see more of my fan fic on this site?

This is the first chapter of a series about Masters and Padawans, inspired by [link] .
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katoo89 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2011
I loved this! Little drabbles that allow insight into the lives of Obi-Wan and Anakin are just wonderful.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2011
Thanks. ^_^
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Koshindou Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009
Very well done - you did a wonderful job on keying on some interesting moments (I particularly like Anakin's thought process on the term 'Master';).

My favorite part was the brief final sentence summing up Mustafar. It was very well done.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2009
Thank you. I really do think Anakin would be freaked out by that at first. ^_^
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Koshindou Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2009
It's an excellent observation, and one that I had never thought about before.
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LoneStranger Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
^_^
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Riptor25 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
this is very interesting! it'd be great if you posted more of your fanfic on here ^^
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
Thanks. I certainly will, as this series seems to be garnering interest (and as I can't put it anywhere else anyway. :( )
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Riptor25 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome! and will you be continuing your Fearful Symmetry fanfic as well?
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
I will. I just need to type the next chapter.
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Riptor25 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome ^^!!
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surfersquid Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
Another awesome job? Do you ever NOT do an awesome job? I can answer that right now: No. No you do not.

Pondering over Anakin's and Obi-Wan's relationship has always been an interesting thinking point for me as well--there's such a long time skip between I and II, that you never really get a chance to see their attitudes toward each other develop, so in the first movie they're really rather ambivalent toward each other, while in the second they have a somewhat complex master/pupil relationship and you're just sort of left standing there wondering how it evolved.

I really like the first sentence; I have often wondered what sort of thoughts must run through the heads of those accustomed to slavery when they first hear a Padawan address their Knight master--especially when the person is or has been a slave themselves, and especially when they've been newly admitted to the Order as a Padawan. One of my characters goes through a similar experience, actually, so it was fun to read about it happening to Ani.

Carpet-cleaning droid!!1one Every time I go into Bed, Bath & Beyond (love that store), I stare longingly at those little floor cleaner robots. They're the closest thing to droids I've been able to find. If only they weren't so ridiculously expensive.

Also, I really like the way you write Obi-Wan. You've really got his character pegged, and it's just making me like his personality more and more. I've always admired his subdued, understated demeanor; he's not a Jedi for the power or the glory, not to look cool, not to have something to hold over people's heads, not because he was forced into it (although, as part of the old Jedi Order, he certainly was). He does it because he knows it's his responsibility, because even though the workings of the Force baffle him at times, he knows he's doing the right thing.

I guess that's why it's so fun for me to watch him grow and change through the six movies; he goes from a relatively inexperienced Padawan with a strong bond to the master he ends up losing, to a Knight struggling to help his own conflicted Padawan whom he must eventually cut down, to old Ben, the wise hermit who goes forth to meet his destiny on the Death Star, knowing he must complete the cycle that began so many years ago, to finally being at peace and being with his master and Padawan again, seeing that balance has finally been brought to the Force.

I also love the way you write Anakin; that underlying sense of superiority, the ambition, the coldly analytical way of looking at things that's near-frightening at times because of how much it resembles Sith teachings without him even knowing it. Way better than a whiny young adult. Why didn't you write the script for Episodes II and III, anyway?

The last part was really touching, too. I really like exploring the personalities of dead characters after they've died, so this was a treat for me. Too many times, death is treated as the absolute end, so it's delightfully jarring to hear a conversation between two people who don't exist as mortals any more. (Which is one of the reasons why I enjoyed writing the Force ghosts in Life Day Carol.)

Exceedingly long comment is exceedingly long.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
Thank you so much! :blushes: And such a review is as much a treat to me as I hope any story would be to you-- you've summed up Obi-Wan so neatly, so circuitously.

I may be able to characterize, but I can't explain the way you have. Anakin and Obi-Wan were actually quite new ground for me; while I've always liked Obi, Hayden Christensen turned me off to Anakin so much that I've only ever written about him to showcase other characters, such as in my few fics about Ahsoka. Making him arrogant, and, as you so rightly say, "coldly analytical" here and not making him too simple and blatant ("I slaughtered them like animals!", "The Council doesn't understand that I should be special!1!") was a challenge, and I'm really glad (and surprised, honestly) that it worked.

"there's such a long time skip between I and II, that you never really get a chance to see their attitudes toward each other develop" That's right, and I feel that the movies could have done a better job of exploring that. There are always the Jude Watson books, but...one does not simply walk into Mordor.

"I have often wondered what sort of thoughts must run through the heads of those accustomed to slavery when they first hear a Padawan address their Knight master" :nod: I really think that one could write a decent AU about Anakin getting freaked out enough about the resemblance to cause some serious...well, AU-ness. But in its current incarnation, this is simply a theme that ~SilverTrumpeter and I used in our drabble series and recycled here. The wording, "master", was just too similar not to discuss. It's also funny how Anakin grew so attached to Qui-Gon, but the meeting between him and Obi-Wan, who the viewers know will become so important in his life, was so casual. A handshake, and then they had more important things to worry about, like getting the Queen off the planet.

LOL I love those little Roombas. If I got one I'd (probably trip over it repeatedly, but that's not the point) name it R2-D2.

"baffle" is such a good word for Obi-Wan. I can't help but base a large chunk of the way I characterize him on that tiny moment in the 2-D Clone Wars cartoon, where he's lying in a bunker with water dripping on his head. He looks so annoyed, and instead of trying to stopper the leak, just turns over and tries to be serene.

And, while he certainly isn't there to look cool, he does manage to do so, doesn't he? :P

"Why didn't you write the script for Episodes II and III, anyway?" Gah best compliment ever. :hug: Do I wish! I just wanna be the Lawrence Kasdan of the prequels...fix up Lucas' brilliant storylines and not-so-brilliant characterization and dialogue. Someday they'll hire me...</wishfull thinking>

Thank you so much for the commentary and conversation. I really don't mind exceedingly long posts. This stuff is what I like to talk about best.
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surfersquid Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
I feel like such a jerk saying this, but I know the feeling. In-depth reviews of my own work are always the ones I most like reading--it's such a disappointment when I get an email from FF.net saying I've got a new review and all it says is something like "lol nice story". I feel almost betrayed.

I've always wanted to see that Clone Wars series, Genndy Tartakovsky is one of my favorite animation directors (I'm a huge Samurai Jack fan). They have it on DVD, right? I have such a huge list of DVDs I need to buy when I start making money.

And yeah...most Jedi just can't help but look cool. But part of Obi-Wan's appeal for me is that he doesn't try to be, which just makes his coolness all the more sincere.

Hey, keep dreaming! I think you'd make an awesome writer for SW, whether it be for novels, TV series, or even if they make more movies!

And phew...glad you don't mind. I'm really enjoying talking about this too, it's nice to be able to hold a thoughtful, intellectual conversation about a subject I enjoy with a really awesome person. :P
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
Gah I know--that is so disappointing. I see no reason why you should feel like a jerk for that. I was always under the impression that people on a writers' site should be able to express their opinions well enough to write a review.

It is on DVD! You might, although I'm not sure, be able to find some of it on starwars.com as well.

I suppose to write SW books I just need to publish other books first, and get noticed. :P

"it's nice to be able to hold a thoughtful, intellectual conversation about a subject I enjoy with a really awesome person." Likewise. ^_^
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surfersquid Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
Whoo DVD! *puts that on the already-hideously-long-list-of-DVDs-I-gotta-buy*

Hehe, thanks. Although my verbosity tends to wax and wane depending on how much else I'm thinking about, and whether or not I've already had breakfast (it sounds crazy, but breakfast seems to dull my mind quite a bit...isn't that the opposite of how it's supposed to work?).
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
Sure--that's just the way humans work I think. I think you're very intelligent--and, more importantly (and perhaps this is the definition of intelligence, as relative as it is?) often look at things from a different angle than I do--we can learn from one another.

(I suppose it is. I never liked breakfast. I'm not ready to digest at that hour...)
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surfersquid Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2009
Hehe, thanks. That's why I enjoy talking to you, too. You have a lot of great ideas that I like to interpret, and I like to see how you interpret my own ideas. Synergy! Or something like that.
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PadawanSushi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
I would kill to see more fanfics on this site!!!! Hee hee. I loved this. It was a good look at Anakin's character and development along with his relationship with Obi-Wan. I don't think they really got too into their relationship in the movies it was just kind of assumed. But yes. Post more here! Hee hee.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
Thanks a lot! ^_^

I will post more of this series as it continues. I'm liking writing short snippets.

They didn't get into it much in the movies. As I was saying in another post on this page, the prequels could do with Lawrence Kasdan coming in and fixing the characterization. Therefore, although there's so much material about the episodes and the Clone Wars, it can be hard to string it all together--which is why I never dared to tackle Anakin as subject before.

Does there seem to be much of a fanfic community here to you? I never felt there was, although of course one always sees fics floating around, and "literature", usually poetry that manages to describe life very well at the same time as sounding like any of a number of dA writers could have penned (typed?) it, but sometimes very excellent prose, makes the front page. I think if one only came here (as opposed to FFN) for fanfic you'd miss a lot-- the slang, the shipping wars, the good reviews (excepting present company of course). This site really isn't built for it; finding out whether you want to read something just from the first line and the title, unknowing of the genre, can lead one down many unwanted paths.
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PadawanSushi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
I've read more the EU stuff for Obi-wan like the series they put about his padawan days with Qui-Gon..I think scholastic put that out...not sure. But Anakin...gosh its ridiculous how much is out there from the comics to cartoons and books. I never felt strongly about his character until I got more into Clone Wars and the comics. I'm actually nervous to write him because a bit later in my 'Colas' fanfic he pops up. A very minor role really but he's there. The characterization of teenage Anakin is something I'd like to research.

I don't think there's really that strong of a fanfic community on here. I've found almost nothing. And what I have found isn't that great. That's why I like exploded when you posted this. I wish there was a stronger community here. I find FFN is a bit of a mix theres really high quality stuff on there and there is also complete crap. There's good reviews and awful ones. So. I've been nervous to post any of my Star Wars stuff on there mostly because the last time I looked almost every fanfiction had to deal with Padme/Anakin which is not something I myself am particularly interested in reading. I think part of the issue with DA not having a strong fanfic community is its harder to narrow down the search engine to Star Wars fanfiction...its difficult for people to track down something they want to read while on FFN its more convenient. I'm also nervous about posting on FFN because what I have on there is absolutely revolting. lol
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009
Yeah, Scholastic did put those out I think. I've read a handful of them, but barely consider them canon. :P

You've said it more succinctly than I did-- FFN is more convenient. There isn't much of a network of writers here. Maybe a club should be formed? Then one could organize fics into categories...You're certainly right about the mixed bag of talent on FFN, which there is here too. I don't read there much any more--although it sounds terribly arrogant, I've come to believe that anything I want to read, I can write myself instead of bothering to go look through all the dreck there. But here's patches of talent, and I keep watch on certain people.

lol you could always delete revolting oldfic...
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PadawanSushi Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
A club would be a good idea. It's not arrogant to think that, those have become my sentiments. The few good authors I find are enough to keep me satisfied. It goes back to that old saying: quality is better than quantity. lol I did in fact delete those old fics I decided they're days of scarring the internet were over. Now FFN is healed....partially. lol
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
Would you be interested in co-founding a club? I really don't want to create more time on the internet instead of doing homework for myself, now I've got this vision of a club where we could have contests, and the stories could be separated into categories (both by genre and era?) within the gallery. There are Star Wars clubs, but none that I know that are devoted to fanfic alone. Then there's also the question of whether we'd have a quality standard, which I'd like to, but as a grammer-Nazi admin of an RPG once upon a time I know that that's the way to make people angry at you.
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PadawanSushi Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
Sure I'd co-found a club. :3 Yeah I know what you mean about homework time but after the initial set up only about a few hours a week really have to go into it. Plus I just like the concept that we'd get to pick the best of the best and have it all in one place like some kind of thanksgiving feast of fanfiction. Lord..my nerd is showing..lol Pfft Proper grammar is important and I don't think I'd want just any old fanfiction on there either. A well edited piece means they were willing to put a lot of thought and time into something. I think a grammar 'Nazi' running a fanfiction club would be a valuable member of a team. :3 I shall PM you with my contact info so we can have a discussion about said club. :3
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
Yep, proper grammar/spelling and a basic grasp of prose are essential. I'll look into what it takes to make a club account--I've got a friend in Scary Atton who'll know. We just need to hash out things like categories, and submission guidelines, yes? (And pettier things like pairings or how to deal with people unwilling to mature tag things that need to be mature tagged.) That can be done over e-mail or note. As long as you're willing to take over if I frantically message you with "OH NOES FINALS 111"--and of course vice versa. I know a handful of people who'll likely be willing to submit and join.
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Colliequest Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think the ending is my favorite part of this fic. One should never stop learning...so true.
Well-written, and I'd definitely love to see more.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
Thanks. Part of what I mean to do with this fic is to explore what teachers...teach, and whether it's true. I'm glad you noticed that.

You will see more. I've got another chapter in the works. If there's any particular pair you'd be interested in seeing, let me know, and I might cover them.
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