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There was liquid where Ahsoka’s montrals were supposed to be, an unusually light weight that canceled out the ultrasonic sense of space that she always subconsciously relied on. It sloshed on the edges of her hearing as she tried to sit up.

She passed a hand over her head (she thought that the hand should be shaking, but it was not, and there was more subtle fear in that then in what had produced the shaking at the start), and felt cool air where the curved tops of her soft horns should have been. A rounded plate covered her head where parts of her mind still told her the base of her montrals were. It emitted a warmth that felt to her palm like that of a datapad which has been running too long, a bright electric burn entirely unlike the unmistakable, softer glow of body heat.

She could remember battling Grievous, could remember when the viewport in his starship’s hallway cracked, although she did not know who had broken it. Then--she was thrown aside into freezing space that seemed to lacerate the back of her throat--

--the General clamped a six-fingered hand over her face as she lost consciousness—


She pushed herself up with warm metal arms. They weren’t hers…were they? Her brain thought they were. They moved, but they were alien to her eyes. But so was her whole body now, as if she were half asleep and unsure how to move outside of dreams. She did not at first recognize her breath as her own, it moved in and out beneath her so inexorably. Her eyes were blurry, but she could not blink to clear them.

A medical droid, impassive and thorough, entered the room and explained to her that she had been seventy percent destroyed by the vacuum, and that her new body would work as well as the old, as long as she got used to it.

She worried about Anakin, but for many weeks after her awakening coherent thoughts still had trouble fixing themselves in her mind for any length of time, and so escape was impossible.

When she was healthy enough to be presented to Count Dooku, she was told of her audience with him and immediately planned to try her best to kill him. The Separatists may have saved her life, but they were the enemy, she needed to get back to Anakin—

Except that as soon as Dooku spoke, it was as if those thoughts had never been. She was loyal to Dooku, to the C.I.S., she simply was, had always been. All thoughts contrary were picked up by a wave and swept away.

After all, the cybersurgeon’s modifications had been necessary—some to ensure her survival, and some to make her tractable. She had not been told of them because he had not wanted her to die of fear when she found out that he had reconstructed her brain almost as much as her body.

When Anakin saw her again, he did not recognize her at first. They circled, tense like massifs scenting unknown intruders in the camp, and she watched his eyes sweep over her too-many-jointed legs, over the sunlight glinting off of where her montrals had crumpled in the void. His gaze met her eyes (still bright and so much more human than her patterned skin), and they narrowed against the light of him from within two of the six strips of red flesh remaining across her face.

When they clashed, fenced, when his saber whirled around her guard and sliced deep into her durasteel side, he recognized the way she automatically switched her grip on her weapon when the battle was not going her way, so that her lightsaber was held horizontally, almost nicking her silvered elbow, so that she could flow through forms she had learned before she knew him.

When she fell to the ground, sliced by another flurry of cuts fueled by Anakin’s righteous rage against this one more opponent set against him by the Separatists (Dooku, Grievous, Ventress, this—each monster pitiable except when right in front of him), he recognized the akul-tooth headdress twined around her louvered wrist.

When she tried to get up, fell over the stump of her left hand, and latched on to his boot with the solid metal grip of her right, he recognized the fearlessness of her, the determination, paired as it was with the softness of her age. He recognized the shards of face, but still not the scattered-puzzle-pieces of a Force presence. She squeezed, claws digging into the leather of his boot, and he could not tell whether she was trying to attack him or embrace him.

He looked at her, his face a mask of anguish, and wondered whether Ahsoka would have wanted him to kill her.
While it is a rare occurance, sometimes I will post a piece of fan fiction on DA if I am proud enough of it and if I think people here will like it. Such is the case with this oneshot, which would be called "Shattered Pieces of the Puzzle Called Myself" if DA was not determined to thwart my long titles at every turn.

This piece was inspired by a video about the making of the Clone Wars television series. In it, the actress who voices Ahsoka Tano had her voice modified with the same software that produces’ Grievous’ voice. It was a rather silly video, but the image of a cyborg Ahsoka would not leave me, easily tied as it was to the scene in an upcoming episode of Clone Wars in which Ahsoka battles Grievous.

This also serves as a semi-plausible reason for why Ahsoka is not seen in episode III.

Disclaimer: SW belongs to GL.
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julianhellsing Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
Great writing. Is there a picture?
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
Yeah, it's in my gallery somewhere. 
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AndromedusQuasar Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredible premise with incredible writing! Great word choice too :D
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
Thank you. :)
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Lady-CrusaderKira Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wooooowww. :) I thought this was an incredible piece! Certainly not the usual take on Ahsoka's death, everyone seems to think she'll get Clone'd. But I really liked the fresh perspective, and your voice is good too. Nice work! :D
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011
Thank you!

I severely doubt this will actually happen, but it's in my headcanon. ^_^
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Lady-CrusaderKira Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hah. No, I agree. This -is- a good, possibly-canon twist. -Waaaay- better than just another Clonocide.

(Most of which are totally unbelievable, anyway. I mean, c'mon...You can't sense the troopers all around you have suddenly become your enemies? ...While I could -sort of- see Plo Kloon in his little fighter, people like Aayla...No excuse. >.< //Rant ends here. Honest it does.// )

And more than that it's believable that the Seppies would do something like that, and I also find Anakin's reaction to be spot on his character. :)

*Adopts as headcanon*
...Assuming they don't ever explain it, anyway. :D

(Incidentally, I haven't been able to see -any- of them since Season One. >_< You know where I could catch them? For all I know they've killed her off already! XD )
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Yay! I'm glad you like it.

Yeah, Aayla's death was silly. I never liked her anyway, and she was so clueless...

I really have no speculation about how Ahsoka's going to get killed off on the show, if she even is. It'll cause such an internet stir.

I like Anakin's part in this story too. :) Yay for it being someone else's headcanon! :3

(Starwars.com! I know they have at least the third season. They upload them every weekend after they air on TV. Or Google 'em. Various sites have them archived.)
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Lady-CrusaderKira Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I do. ^_^ Have you written many shorts?

Ehn. Well, I -liked- her... (Godssakes. She was kick-arse and pretty and -blue-. Are you kidding? I wanted to -be- her!) ...But c'mon... The -younglings- in the -temple- had better sense than she did!

Rofl. A part of me hopes she escapes to some Rim world...I really like her character...
Oooooh man. I can see the headlines now... xD


Lol. Always good when you can worm your way into your audience's brains. O_O :)

( Awesome! Thank you so much! :D You're the sauce. )
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Check out my fanfiction.net page (I'm skywalker05 there) and you'll find that I've written a lot more Star Wars stuff.

I like Kit Fisto too much to like Aayla. :P But she's okay. Anyway I find Ahsoka more interesting.

(You're welcome!)
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Lady-CrusaderKira Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Will do! :) I love fanfic.net. That's my next area of conquest. >:) (Well. My next membership-goal, anyways. XD )

Rofl. Kit is the bomb. :) I probly like Plo Kloon the best...(Clone Wars, anyway...) He always just looked like he had a story, to me. ^_^ And I love stories.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011
Haha, it's a very organized place. Occasionally scary, but very organized. If you join up let me know your username and I'll add you to my favorites list. I've been on that site for...oh, way too many years now. XD

Plo Koon is really cool too!
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I-Am-Fear-Its-Self Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
cool...
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010
Thanks!
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I-Am-Fear-Its-Self Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
your welcome, do you know how to get art on this website?
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010
How to post it you mean? There's a "submit art" button on the top bar of the site. ^_^
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I-Am-Fear-Its-Self Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks!
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Raikoh-illust Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, great story, very sad too. And you know for some reason this is something that could happen to Ahsoka in a possible future episode. I mean, she could lose an arm or a leg or something. And remember those pics I posted that had the "?????"s on thier title? Those were in fact my version of a cyborg Ahsoka.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010
Thanks! I think it would be very Star Wars if that happened. :P

Hmm, I do remember those! (Are they still in your gallery? I just looked, but can't seem to find them. Anyway I'd be curious to see what your interpretation of that would look like. If I recall, your ???? pictures were as mysterious and obscured as their title. :P)
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Raikoh-illust Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, they are still there, you just have to go further in my gallery. I haven't done another of those type of pictures for a long time, I think the last one I did was back in May. I do plan to some day make another similar picture, but this time I will finally reveal how she looks.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010
Well I look forward to it!
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RoverGirl Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I really needed to read this whilst awaiting to ssee the doc about something!!! Not!!

This fic puts me on edge, and also makes me feel sad for Ahsoka. Why hurt her?!

10/10
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2010
Thanks. It was sortof meant to put people on edge.

Part of my fascination with cyborgs comes from my own surgeries. (Not that I'm a cyborg in any way. XD) It helps to deal with my own feelings of having a fallible body when I see just how far the body can be stretched.

It's nothing personal toward Ahsoka. I draw quite a lot of cyborg Darth Maul too. XD
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RoverGirl Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredible. It's great that you've found a positive output to deal with your problems, not many get do that.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2010
^_^ It is good. I guess it's one of the perks (or curses) of being a writer.
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RoverGirl Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
It's agood curse, that what I say.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2010
It allows curses to be good, anyway. ^_^
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RoverGirl Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:nod:
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SpaceShipEarth Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010
Very nice story very nice

Can't wait to read more of it
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010
Thank you!

This is a oneshot.
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SpaceShipEarth Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010
Oh, I am sad now.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010
:(

I did feel that this story was served best by a short format. If you want more, there's fan art of it in my gallery, and more fics about Ahsoka as well-- [link] [link]
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SpaceShipEarth Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010
Thanks man
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KaelaCroftArt Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010  Professional General Artist
I forgot to tell you! I was sitting in a restaurant in the airport waiting for my flight back to Denver and to amuse myself I decided to read some of your works. Holy, they are very cool. I felt like I was reading a hit novel, you know? You weren't kidding when you were talking about your writing skills haha.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010
:dance: Oh thank you so much! "Shattered Pieces" is one of the ones I'm most proud of. One day I just gotta find a Star Wars author/editor/George Lucas who tells me my stuff reads like a hit novel, lol! But srsly, a comment like that means a lot. A writer's goal is to be entertaining, so hearing that you turned to my stuff at all is an ego boost. Maybe one day I'll write for something you illustrate. ^_^
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KaelaCroftArt Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010  Professional General Artist
I hope I illustrate something that you write that would be very cool.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2010
:highfive:

I've thought about trying to write for a comic, but my own art skillz don't really support it. If you're ever interested in a collaboration...
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KaelaCroftArt Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010  Professional General Artist
Lol if you can believe it I am the worst at comic making. I just get so bored with them and give up.
Now my friend for middle school is quite talented with comic making. She cranked out like 3 a year I swear.
They were quite funny and I own all of them.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2010
Nifty. Was this Star Wars stuff, or original?

Comic storytelling is difficult because it's a very unique medium, and the writer/artist has to know that their story can be told best in that way--for example, the writing and art shouldn't give the same information. It's hard! XD
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KaelaCroftArt Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010  Professional General Artist
It was her original work, it revolved around us and our school days.
The teachers were these epic bad guys and we had awesome powers. I should scan a page...
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010
lol Sounds a little like Scott Pilgrim in the way it dramatizes the world. I love stuff like that. One day I'll write a good school story myself...
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TheBountyHunteress7 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2010
Wow that was sort of moving.....
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2010
:) Thank you.
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TheBountyHunteress7 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2010
I almost cryed
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2010
:pat: It's great as a writer to hear that my story affected someone like that. Need something to make you happier? [link]
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TheBountyHunteress7 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2010
yes that made me very happy, peed me pants
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padme-naberrie Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009
Wow, awesome work :) Thanks for sharing!!

Now I know what I'll be thinking about in class xD
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009
LOL What a great comment--I am pleased to know that you'll be thinking about this flight of fancy. ^_^ Thank you.
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padme-naberrie Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009
You're welcome, my pleasure :D And it made class more enjoyable ;P
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WarbeastKing Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2009
I'm pretty sure Ashoka dies in the new season of clone wars.
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